- 我翻译的,高手们帮我看一下有没有错误谢谢故事梗概： 音乐梦幻剧
- 故事梗概：
梦幻剧《马兰花》的故事取材于一段中国民间传奇：马兰山上有一朵马兰花，它充满神奇的力量、能满足人们的愿望。马兰山上住着一个英俊勇敢的青年马郎，他是马兰花的守护神。马兰山下有一对美丽的孪生姐妹大兰和小兰，姐妹俩都爱上了马郎。但最终大兰轻易丢弃了到手的幸福，而小兰用真心赢得了马兰花嫁给了马郎，快乐地生活在马兰山的动物王国里。森林阴暗势力老狼也时时窥视着马兰花，欲夺取马兰花主宰森林。他奸诈地化身为老猫，并利用大兰的妒嫉害死了小兰，逼迫大兰冒充小兰、夺走了马兰花、毁灭了马兰花。于是，围绕着这朵马兰
- 1.Long long ago on Ma Lan mountain bsted a Malan flower with supernatural power to make people's wishes come true.
改为:Longlongago,ontheMaLanMountain, pernatural一般指超自然的,而是一种魔力。2。young saint?在这里改为 a handsome young man。 guardian本来就是守护神的意思。
3。马兰山下应该是at the foot of the mountain. underthe mountain给人感觉是在山的底下，难道又要发生劈山救母的故事？
4。Under the mountain, there were two beautiful twin girls. One was called "DaLan" and the other was called "XiaoLan`".
这句不如直接改为：At the foot of the mountain, there were two beautiful twin girls, Dalan and XiaoLan.
5.DaLan always dreamed of luxurious life so she lightly gave up the chance for happiness. Xiao Lan won Malang's heart with her diligence and goodness
改为：However, Dalan always dreamed of luxurious life and lightly gave the happiness at hand, while Xiaolan finally won Malang's heart with her diligence and kindness.
5....so that it could carry out an evil scheme.
改为：。。。so that it could help him to carry out his evil scheme.
6.The wicked wolf murdered Xiao Lan through by an insidious trick and engrossed the Malan flower.
改为：The wicked wolf took advantage of Dalan's jealousy and murdered Xiao Lan in the form of a cat.
7. Ma Lang buried the Ma Lan flower in the earth with animals马郎把马兰花和动物们葬在了一起？不对吧？
Malang and the animals buried Malan Flower in the earth
8.with their soul改为with their souls.
9.Eventually their behave moved sky-god
改为：Eventually, they moved the god in the heaven.
10.Ma Lan flower broke through the soil and blossomed out again
Malan flower bursted out of the soil and bloomed again.
11.Xiao Lan was also reborn in the Ma Lan flower他不是重新出生而是复活。
Xiao Lan also revived in the Malan Flower.
12Jin Puzai :是不是Jin Fuzai?(金复载）
第二段翻译还是不错的。